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    Question HELP! English sentense

    I need your help
    Please check and help my (short)English sentense

    I'm going to create a piece of art-work for my client
    My client is the president of the Nestlé, the biggest food company in the world
    He is American
    I have to attach some message and some word descriptions with my work
    But my English(English is my second language) is poor

    So I surely need your help!

    *The word descriptions should be polite/simple and heart-touched sentense

    Well, I discribe my work to you
    It is a small piece of photo collages-art work
    A friend of the president of the Nestlé brought some original photographs to me and I'm going to make a work with them

    I would like to make a bird nest with these photo images
    Because of the Nestlé logo design


    My idea is like this...




    I form a circle with people photo images like a bird nest
    People make kind a nest with theirselves and maybe they are birds in this work
    A nest is a bird's house for brooding eggs and hatching chicks
    It should be a secure and peaceful, feeding and producing, and fly freely to anywhere

    There is no "top" or bottom, you can make and display any aspect the top and bottom just as you like.
    Becasue this work is a square shape and the image makes a circle

    I made my own poor English discription

    "This work is a box art that "a sense of secure and supporting imagery"
    such as a bird nest and such a message which "accepted, and can fly
    away from any kind of place anywhere".
    You may make any aspect the top and bottom just as you like. "

    But I am not confident with this sentense, maybe it has many mistakes and wrong words
    Maybe you don't understand what I want to say cleary


    So please correct or arrenge this sentense like above

    I have to send my work tomorrow with some nice message

    Thank you very much
    Last edited by Godspeed; 03-04-2011 at 06:43 PM.

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    This box art is disigned after a birds nest.
    in hopes of portraying the message of community, acceptance, & love. With the ability to fly away in any direction to any destination.
    (there is no no right or wrong top & bottom to this artwork)


    - i hope this is along the lines you were looking.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Pikey View Post
    This box art is disigned after a birds nest.
    in hopes of portraying the message of community, acceptance, & love. With the ability to fly away in any direction to any destination.
    (there is no no right or wrong top & bottom to this artwork)


    - i hope this is along the lines you were looking.
    Oh! Thank you very very much Pikey!
    This is very simple and beautiful which I wanted to discribe

    Well, one question(sorry with my poor English)
    I don't understand this
    (there is no no right or wrong top & bottom to this artwork)

    you use two "no" in this sentense
    Is it okey?
    and what's meaning of "wrong top"?

    Sorry I don't see the meaning with my skill

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    it basicly means he can hang it with any side being the top or the bottom & it will be correct
    1.2.0 Argen Black & White
    1.1.0 Red Tegu
    0.0.1 Blue Tegu
    1.0.0 All American Tegu
    0.1.0 Hypo Red Tail Boa
    1.0.0 Lazik Tiger BP
    1.0.0 Normal Paradox BP
    1.0.0 Cuban Tree Frog
    2.3.0 America Toads
    1.0.0 Masked Ferret
    1.1.0 Children
    Rats & Roaches (Dubia)

    RIP-
    0.0.1 RedxB/W Tegu (Stevie Wonder)
    1.0.0 Croc Gecko (Waylan Jones I)

    & More to come

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    ops there is only suppossed to ne one "No"

    so it should be:

    (there is no right or wrong top & bottom to this artwork)
    1.2.0 Argen Black & White
    1.1.0 Red Tegu
    0.0.1 Blue Tegu
    1.0.0 All American Tegu
    0.1.0 Hypo Red Tail Boa
    1.0.0 Lazik Tiger BP
    1.0.0 Normal Paradox BP
    1.0.0 Cuban Tree Frog
    2.3.0 America Toads
    1.0.0 Masked Ferret
    1.1.0 Children
    Rats & Roaches (Dubia)

    RIP-
    0.0.1 RedxB/W Tegu (Stevie Wonder)
    1.0.0 Croc Gecko (Waylan Jones I)

    & More to come

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    I hope it works out well for you.
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    Thank you Pikey, Thank you enigma
    I appreciated to Pikey you made nice&beautiful sentenses
    I know this forum may not be the right place to have my English checked, but I had no time
    Of course I used internet transrator, however it transrates wrong all the time
    It's difficult to express things through my nuance
    Pikey has got what I wanted to express exactly and he made simple&beautiful one for me!
    I take your sentense for my work
    Thank you very much

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    no problem man, here to help in any way i can.

    yeah we have a lot of words translators dont use or dont use correctly. we have such a difficult language

    ie. They're over there by their car. (3 words sound the same spelled differently and mean different things)
    1.2.0 Argen Black & White
    1.1.0 Red Tegu
    0.0.1 Blue Tegu
    1.0.0 All American Tegu
    0.1.0 Hypo Red Tail Boa
    1.0.0 Lazik Tiger BP
    1.0.0 Normal Paradox BP
    1.0.0 Cuban Tree Frog
    2.3.0 America Toads
    1.0.0 Masked Ferret
    1.1.0 Children
    Rats & Roaches (Dubia)

    RIP-
    0.0.1 RedxB/W Tegu (Stevie Wonder)
    1.0.0 Croc Gecko (Waylan Jones I)

    & More to come

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    Thank you Chris for helping him . I'm sorry that I haven't been on here to help out so much any more. Hope all goes well for you with this piece of Art . Please keep us posted.
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